New writer

Hello I’m new here.so I just started writing because I often daydream a lot. And I have so many ideas. I started working on one of my original stories called “Sons of oblivion” on wattpad my writing format is a little bit too unorthodox. As I get my thoughts together i will revise and rewrite my story. I just want to know what do you guys think about it. https://www.wattpad.com/story/386359960?utm_source=ios&utm_medium=link&utm_content=share_writing&wp_page=create&wp_uname=Marquies6